bobthewriter
Man, what boring chapters! Where's that fun writing in the first chapters?? This was just dumping and more dumping of information that won't add anything to the story... Where's the dialogue? The development of the story?? It seems like the author got lost... And why the hell focus on a single development path?? He's an RPG character who can only use Mage skills because he chose to go to magic school?? What nonsense is this!!! He can train the body, time and space magic, so why do you (author) make it seem like he is abandoning everything for magic!?? This doesn't make sense... Return to the light author!
He should create a Carriage that’s like a different world inside with everything he could possibly need like greenhouses, laboratories, a library, ranches for different animals and magical creatures, hundreds of bedrooms, bathrooms, kitchens, gaming rooms, and more that he can use as a house and take with him to any world he goes to in the future