ZoroTraineeWriter
I’m not liking how this is going because it just feels like he just gave up all his responsibilities. I understand that he was forced to go to school but he could have fought more against that. He also could still have a voice in the village. The clan elders respect him so why can’t he talk to them and still work with the uchiha clan? It just feels like he became completely clueless which goes against his original character that was really cautious and proactive. Idk it just feels like his character changed to moved the plot. Feels a little lazy.
The author wanted a romance and it occurred to him to transform the MC into a clueless man oblivious to all the problems that surrounded him. He is now a better than average student in the academy and is living a stage of ignorance. The author wants to follow the canon, that's why he changed the MC's personality.
this story has fallen off for me, you just keep repeating things from earlier chapters, not to mention the complete copy and Paste of paragraphs from earlier in the same chapter I feel like I have been hit with a Genjutsu just rereading trash on repeat. the story is not bad but there was no reason for the MC to be left out of the village's influence. you might as well just time-skip the moment he was put in the academy if you don't know what you want to write for this time frame because no one cares about a 14 -year-old girl who will have nothing to do with the MC having a crush on him. we only care about the Heroine. if you want to mention how the village changed without the MC influence or these no-name girls you can just mention it in one full chapter after the time-skip or give it a brief mention. no one cares either way because this isn't moving the story along
I ate lunch today, tonight I will have dinner, the next day I will have breakfast. So just to tell you I ate lunch today, tonight I shall have dinner, the next day I shall have breakfast. But I kind of need you to know that I ate lunch today, tonight I will have dinner, the next day I will have breakfast. I won't tell you why it matters, but I ate lunch today, tonight I will have dinner, the next day I will have breakfast.The Chapter.
I trust that the next chapter would be more better because the current one today was a mess I am also kind of disappointed though because the mc so oblivious about what is currently happening to his own clan maybe the elders could ask help from the mc since he was there backbone of negotiating but didn't the mc had student to train what happened to them the the chapter didn't even mentioned anything about them or if tobirama took them as there student or something
There is one point that you can use to weaken Tobirama's influence in the eyes of every Konoha and Uzumaki clan later. This is related to point 4 that you wrote about kekei genkai experiments and Tobirama's Edo Tensei. Tobirama will definitely study Edo tensei but he will definitely experiment with corpses or living people secretly without being discovered by other people in the clan, Konoha or the enemy, except Hashirama who might find out accidentally or Hashirama knows but that's when Madara betrayed and died. so there is a slight change in his ideals. Here you can manipulate using Obito's eyes and provide the corpses of the most influential clans in Konoha such as Uchiha, Senju, Hyuga and Ino-shika-cho secretly... Well, you have to create the story process itself because I can only describe it, but the process is difficult because knowing Tobirama's personality is someone who is quite paranoid but quite wise and full of caution (although Danzo is more extreme).