Myra_Agpalza_Butac
I like the introduction of the main characters though, I could’ve wished the chapters are longer. But yes, short but frequent updates are good too. I like how the author paints the images of the characters within the first two chapters already, I hope it’s the same for the world too. I would love to see their reality described as well. That way I can also have a feel of what their universe is like. Keep it up, Kudos!
This chapter was quite a rollercoaster of emotions and unexpected developments! The dialogue between Rube and Hiraya was intriguing, and the concept of offering exclusivity to clients added an interesting layer to the story. To make the chapter even more engaging, you might consider delving deeper into the characters' internal thoughts and feelings. This would help readers connect with their motivations and dilemmas on a more personal level. Additionally, when introducing unique concepts like tracking ovulation, it might be helpful to provide a bit more context or explanation so that readers can fully grasp its significance to the story. Overall, you've got a captivating narrative going on here, and I'm curious to see how this proposal will impact the characters and the plot. Keep up the good work!