Comments of chapter undefined of House Tarth (SI) Fanfiction

Just stop with the side story…

Thanks for the chapter. I assume the chapter was from the "son's" POV, right? In that case, don't use the "You" pronoun as it doesn't give the right Pov. If it's from 1st person POV, then you need to use "I". For example, I said, I saw, etc.....