The problem with this story is that, The scene are really stretched like really stretched it's like you are trying to milk every single words you can to make the chapters longer For eg the conversation with miach, a lot of things were unnecessary like retelling every thing which we already know which makes the pace of the story sooo slow along with your release schedule it's hetic. For a story to be interesting there should not be any retelling of what has happened in the story which you have already told/took the time to tell it. It wastes the readers time and also occupies your book's portion which you could have used for other things I can see that you are using show not tell but you are using it too much there are times where you should slack and just tell not show which will improve the pacing problem There are times where you should just tell The story is good but I hope you will fix this problem which will make your book a lot better