Comments of chapter undefined of Dark Hero in Tate no Yuusha
Dark Hero in Tate no Yuusha
Thot_Slaughterer
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Lo siento por tu abuela. Pero si te sirve, tu historia tiene una trama muy buena por lo que veo pero la cara del protagonista la siento insulsa, sus sentimientos siempre no terminan de cuadrar y la parte donde el acepta su "otra parte" siento que le falto profundidad, nose darte un consejo sobre esas ultimas 2 cosas pero si podrias dar pequeños comentarios despues de los dialogos sobre como esta su cara o que empieza a hacer. Ej:luego de decir eso el empezo a poner rigidos los musculos de su cuerpo para escapar si ese tipo intenta algo.(un ejemplo sobre lo que empieza a hacer) Otro ejemplo seria:(luego de una palabra dramatica, no en todas las palabras, solo para que su expresion concuerde con la situacion) despues de decir eso, el sonrio de manera escalofriante y luego impulso su cuerpo para seguir con la lucha.(siempre que sea corto, si es mucho detalle va a quedar como una novela china).
The rising of the shield hero truly is annoying, I watched it but the constant danger/drama and disrespect he and his girls recieve drives me nuts Yeah it’s a pretty good story so far, I enjoy the portrayal of Blood Knight Little bit disappointing that cannon is irrevocably changed. I personally find the whole “Hidden Big evil guy” trope Incredibly annoying but to each their own But I really do enjoy the reputation Blood Knight is building and all the work he has done. I hope to see more instances of his reputation being for either intimidation or just purely recognization from the common people Again these are my personal preferences I don’t speak for other readers only myself
Sorry for your loss. Now for the novel your novel is good bro, the only problem is that we got stock here in this ''blood knight'' thing, instead of creating small chaps that progress slowly with this plot make a few chaps that end this arc, we want to see mc starting his harem, preparing for the summoning of the 4 heroes and see the plot started already, thats the thing, it is good to see mc saving people but you dragged too much, its not interestng anymore.
First of all, sorry for your grandma, hope you feel better soon.Now to the story:1- The MC feels like a boring spiderman subservient to the Royal Family of Melromarc. This isn't the type of story you want to write if you want to surpass Shield Hero. The Mc only has knowledge of Season 1, so he doesn't know if the story ends in a tragedy, with the hereos failing their task of half-assing it. He also has enemity with a God. So his priority should be to travel the whole world and collect as many bloodlines as he can, level up as much as possible before the waves start, and find good and strong companions. Not playing the friendly neighbourhood Spiderman in Melromarc and being a lackey to this new prince that wasn't in the orginal story which seems suspicious.2- The Timeskip was done well in my opinion. Imo a better way to have done it is immediately jump to the future, where the MC is having a hard battle where he showcases most of his new abilities, save for his trump cards which could be shown later in more important fights. And then as the story continued you could have well placed flashbacks about important events that happened during the timeskip.3- Personally, im more interested in seeing the MC's interactions with the 4 Heroes than the current events. The story is 30 chapters in and the Heroes, which are a crucial part of a Shield Hero FF still are not summoned yet. So i hope i can see that as soon as possible.
I’m sorry to hear about your Grandmother, I wish you and your family all the best. As for the story, it’s been fun to me, but there’s been a large amount of timeskips and “telling” rather than showing, which takes me out a bit and like you I don’t overly care for the Shield Hero setting. However the Blood Beserker is an interesting idea and would be fun to read in a multitude of setting. Also not really a fan of “Evil Gods” and Curses having such a large impact on a character, because it always feels like the character is taking one step forward and two steps back, so it’s hard to connect with them. Overall it’s been a fun read, but if this is how you write for a setting you don’t care for, I’d love to see how you do with a setting you actually like.
I'm just now arriving here. losing our loved ones is the worst. be well 🙂 . ....as for your story, I slept while listening to the early story arc of mostly grind leveling. three or more attempts from the beginning have helped me rest. with my traumatic brain injuries, it's never possible to schedule or even expect me to be consciously aware at any time. the training montages almost always put me to sleep 😴 . it's best to write short summaries about these tedious story arcs than pouring so much of your time and efforts into many details of the level grinding. i hope something of this is helpful 😁
