Comments of chapter undefined of Malevolent Warlock: Sin Of Eternity

It's going a little too fast. Give the readers a little time to process this and there is no way a father who has known his son to be a cripple for life will react that casually when he suddenly speaks.

Instead of making him completely disabled, it would be better if he were in a coma due to an accident or something, so if he wakes up even if he draws attention it is forgivable.

Great first chapter ! But I also agree with Sulphur, it's maybe a bit too fast but it depends of the preferences, some people may prefer it that way.Still good enough to make me wanna continue reading though !

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yes I have a slight problem author!! the chapters they are........too......short 😁😁I know scared you right. seriously though good books need longer chapters for prices were forced to pay. ☹️good so far though keep up the good work 👏

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the English is bit too rich to understand. try using simpler words. but again, it just my opinion

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I wasn't saying anything bad I was just trying to say i liked it enough to have longer chapters . sorry if u misunderstood I'm told I'm not very clear when I speak these days so it's is good enough to want it to have Neverending chapters 😁

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