Comments of chapter undefined of The Reborn Wife Of The Tyrant CEO
The Reborn Wife Of The Tyrant CEO
black_flowertrend
Chapter comments15
the way you set the scene gives too much detail on other characters. like the waiter in this chapter.there really was no point in explaining how pretty she was since she isn't a main plot character. also, not over explaining character appearance can help readers get a mental image they like more. since not many people have the same "taste". I do think your story has good potential. so I'm not trying to be mean or anything. just an observation.
black_flowertrend:sorry, I don't get what you mean can you please explain it
So far so good. The only problem I see, which I also mentioned in the chapter, is the lack of properly structuring the writing. It seems like paragraphs are being forced on the author by word count. Usually every speaker has his or her own paragraph to easily distinguish that a new person is speaking. This chapter is full of run on paragraphs and it is distracting from the story.
