Comments of chapter undefined of Five Echoes

I suggest not overusing the language style. It will unnecessarily weigh the story's progression. With this style and diction you will be forced to use a whole chapter to describe only one situation. Besides, it will be increasingly difficult to keep this up for the entirety of your novel. I am saying this because, I have been reading so many books with the same diction and how they failed to produce more updates later. Tell more story but use less flowery expressions. You will feel better while telling the story. I like this style but I would LOVE to read MORE of your story and see you complete it in the long run.