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Comments of chapter undefined of The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)

Talleyrand
TalleyrandLv13Talleyrand

By the way now that I think about it it would really be a huge storyline error if you introduced magic now. Your MC lived 4500 years, traveled every corner of this planet and met countless people. NEVER ONCE has he come into contact with magic in any form. But one day like that out of nowhere a magician attacks him. No, it's completely incoherent and stupid. In addition, you clearly pointed out in the first chapter that he was only an immortal human, stronger and faster than a vampire. If you want to make him special so much, keep going, make him progressively stronger and faster like an original in The Vampire Diaries

SHCH7
SHCH7Lv1SHCH7

Hello Author. Thanks for the chapter. Have to agree with one of the earlier comments- MC has amassed knowledge for 4k+ years, and now, suddenly, magic exists... Also, apart from getting super-rich, will the MC have no impact on history? You gave the reason that he doesn't want to interfere. But, then there's nothing to write/read about till the plot starts. I would suggest you to do a time skip if you don't want to change history. Anyway, for the past few chapters also, there has been nothing major happening. It's not even like the MC needs to grow and mature by facing challenges. He's already 4500 years old.......

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Joseva_Vataiki_4510
Joseva_Vataiki_4510Lv3Joseva_Vataiki_4510

I agree about magic but he does bot have restrain himself about changes I mean he already started a bank sooo....other that that I love this book😘😘😘please keep the updates coming and...HELLO from fiji🇫🇯🇫🇯🇫🇯

Kacper_Furude
Kacper_FurudeLv5Kacper_Furude

Adam could go and observe Jesus because it would be interesting from distance and mb would see if water walking and changing water to wine was truth or scam and than leave.

HecAllenWin
HecAllenWinLv3HecAllenWin

Está capitulo contradice la historia por completo.

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theanimemail
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Edit: might want to go through the end of this chap and capitalize stuff.

ouragan_
ouragan_Lv13ouragan_

Given the way it's worded, I hope it's the MC who finds his soulmate first. The MC still hasn't met a werewolf it seems to me. otherwise, gifted vampires are primarily humans whose human abilities have been amplified. Jane and Alec have already demonstrated psychic abilities as humans...

GawS
GawSLv5GawS

thanks for the chapter 👍👍

fredygiant
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Leo_Santos
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Thanks for the chapter

Xedornox
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Insane_Fantasy
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tftc~~~○●

Greatj95
Greatj95Lv14Greatj95

thx for the chapter love the book so far your going great

Bisabing
BisabingLv4Bisabing

Thanks for the chapter

THE_MAN_HIMSELF
THE_MAN_HIMSELFLv4THE_MAN_HIMSELF

good chapter bro. keep it up. 👌 👍🏻

Jack_Moriarty
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Zero93
Zero93Lv6Zero93

Thanks for chapter

xcevia
xceviaLv1xcevia

Talvez sería genial que e mc expandiera sus amigos o no se conseguir un hijo para molestar xD

TANRICI
TANRICILv3TANRICI

Tftc

SpeedyG
SpeedyGLv10SpeedyG

Thanks for chapter!