toniloba_
This was a mess. Why all the descriptions about the copying and deleting and logging off and in and then he dies and it doesn't matter? I read it twice to make sure: What, why, how all is that important to the story? It's just seems dumb, if you know anything about computers, and really doesn't add anything, does make it seems like a mess of a chapter, not good, very not good when its the first chapter and you hope we stick for the next one.