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I hope whenever MC return to his real world, he should first find this woman and 'tame' her properly.
Okay, I feel bad for Martin. His father?!! That's tough and first thing I'll do if it's me is to come back for that chicđ¤
Your Prologue is â¤ď¸â¤ď¸, and I don't see any problems there
Okay... chapter was okay, description fleshed out, plot shoots in on time, and the cliffhanger was well placed. lets's see how it goes
better but when he goes to bathroom should be i wonder where the chick wearing red went he thought to himself
okay, first chapter is quiet impressive
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Awesome read, I could literally envision the scene... nice work
needs some work first few parts confusing if sections of night club or club house not important why mention it??? why was she in the men's bathroom before he entered but he didn't see her?