Grispera
This really needs an edit. The grammar and choice of words are poor in many of the sentences; an example is when mentioning the events of using a "chopper" to get to a "port." Grammar aside, helicopter and harbor for the choice words would fit better when describing events occurring instead of slang words like chopper. First impressions are important.
Are you using an app like grammary? Copy a draft of your writings to that, then sort though the errors it prompts you with. That should solve like 80% of the issues your chapters are having.
Grispera:Gotcha boss. Though it will take many days before I edit the errors and all properly. Make do with my writing till the free chapters, as I have improved as I continued writing. And after that it's all according to your satisfaction.
Author, you should consider changing the name of this novel. It sounds like a title for a female-centric novel. If you want your book to become famous, choose a title that includes words like "cultivation" or "harem." Additionally, you should consider changing the cover page. Many perverts won't read your book because it doesn't have a poster featuring a woman with large assets. By the way, I have added it to my reading list, but I currently don't have enough time to start reading it. I will begin reading it when I have a little more free time.