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This really needs an edit. The grammar and choice of words are poor in many of the sentences; an example is when mentioning the events of using a "chopper" to get to a "port." Grammar aside, helicopter and harbor for the choice words would fit better when describing events occurring instead of slang words like chopper. First impressions are important.
something else do all wraiths have this system and access to this store?
still think because it's a form of energy and seems to be maybe related to his soul there should be a way to prevent excess loss of that energy. That ultimately its a matter of control of that energy which he currently doesn't possess. These packs would be best suited in emergency cases to recover what was lost. which could affect his strength for having that portion of energy missing.
should of gone by stage he's in. 3rd order should need a 3rd order med pack and so on. As he gets stronger would imagine he would be made up of a denser or higher quality eldritch energy. Meaning what would be needed to heal him would be more demanding as he gets stronger. Who knows maybe once he hits the 4th order the cost will increase just something to think about.
not going to lie this could pass for a short haired girl in an anime lol, very feminine.
so multiple reincanations in the same body, young master trope, child hood friend being guided by a spirit in her head, someone else having a legendary sword, useless elders with a father that abandoned his family. Forced engagement that causes issues. Did I miss anything like come on this is just a gag at this point.
appreciate the thought being put into the plot curious to see if these events will have a effect on Noah's character. Be a waste to put this effort into a flashback for a dead character.
yup hope hope this is the last of this cliche but some how I doubt it.
comment like this could make you think long tian is reincarted.
sure that's a funny sight if him being lean and tone is rare amongst his piers are the rest just 4'8-4'10 muscle heads or skin and bones? 𤣠Author image you creating with these younglings is odd. Having a lean athletic build isn't odd to see amongst 14 years old now let alone a cultivation world.
14 and 5 feet? Hes even considered to be on the tall side for his age. That's wild cultivators are little people in this novel.
respect different approach can appreciate it
characters in the novel aren't just going to he idiots are they? the cliche that Chinese writers created that made all elders idiots and young masters just around to be face slapped is horrible writing.
surprised you decided to have 0 development on the mentality of the Mc. Just went from one of the worst betrayals you could imagine to what we are reading now. Can see the maid being a soft spot for the Mc for when it came down to seeing her again. But the entire interaction so far with demon/dragon girl also? It's like influence from his own life experiences isn't reflected at in what we are reading. From a extremely naive Mc that was horribly betrayed by his wife and suppose friend that even extended to the general public. To a Mc that's very forward in there emotions as if there's 0 trauma. Why even have the events of the first chapter occur if it wasn't to be a catalyst for personality development? Would expect to see more rage and distrust from the Mc, can already predict he will see those 2 characters and there be a dialog about how angry he is with them but that being it. Honestly hope I'm wrong but the character interactions just don't see to fit at all from the setting you created.
this is just weird.
when can we expect updates to start again?
interesting usage of smoke, Question I have is he able to manipulate smoke to become any variable of smoke that exist or is he using a special blend of tobacco to create a desired form of smoke? If so Cigars with different blends prepared could be a interesting concept.
Don't think this should be here.