Comments of chapter undefined of Shards of the Broken Heart
Shards of the Broken Heart
Grispera
Chapter comments16
This really needs an edit. The grammar and choice of words are poor in many of the sentences; an example is when mentioning the events of using a "chopper" to get to a "port." Grammar aside, helicopter and harbor for the choice words would fit better when describing events occurring instead of slang words like chopper. First impressions are important.
Author, you should consider changing the name of this novel. It sounds like a title for a female-centric novel. If you want your book to become famous, choose a title that includes words like "cultivation" or "harem." Additionally, you should consider changing the cover page. Many perverts won't read your book because it doesn't have a poster featuring a woman with large assets. By the way, I have added it to my reading list, but I currently don't have enough time to start reading it. I will begin reading it when I have a little more free time.
