Comments of chapter undefined of Hades in the Multiverse
Hades in the Multiverse
Cedric_7512
Chapter comments56
The MC should stop worrying about the protagonists of the world he visits. They’re strangers to him. Why would he give the system to Jin-Woo? He doesn’t even know him. He has no responsibility to be hand holding him and giving him what he would get in canon. And regarding the dialogue in different languages: is there a reason you’re showing other languages and bracketing things? Presumably, in the beginning of the story, they’d all be speaking Ancient Greek and not English, but you made it show English. In Jujutsu Kaisen world, they’d be speaking Japanese in the place you were, but you showed it as English. So why not do the same going forward?
I get it, but it feels extremely forced when you write it. It's like I'm reading a 12 year old trying to convince himself that what he's saying is true. You have to believe me, you should improve the way you write and describe things, because when I read it's like I'm reading a story made by a child, adding that it seems more like a summary because of how fast everything unfolds, while the explanations don't make much sense. Whether you take it or not, it's what I think.
Cedric_7512:Exactly. I would also do this. You must remember that he will live forever and these things are a good time to spend the time and have fun.
