RealmWeaver
Well done on the beating, but…… it would've been better if you put some explanations in the narratives to justify his action…… cause many people really misunderstood and can't connect why exactly did he feel the need to beat the kid…… They would think it's out of spite and out of character. But it'd been better if you had put in some lines to clarify that this is to remind that, "Doesn't matter if it's impossible to avoid, you're weak, and you've grown lax… so lax that they found gaps in your respite."