Comments of chapter undefined of World Travel Simulator System In Modern Society
World Travel Simulator System In Modern Society
ShadowKatake
Chapter comments44
This first chapter is excellent at mobilizing the readers' emotions, and initially introducing the plot of the story, but there is a very big flaw in the logic of the world's background. It is impossible to be a modern world the way society has been described, it has been described that "transcendents" are fighters and they are the only beings with human rights, and non-transcendents doesn't even have the right to study, nor does they have basic human rights. Such a society is possible, but not a modern society: in such a society there are no engineers, doctors, high-yield agriculture, computers, cell phones... I suggest that a portion of this chapter be rewritten.
Was it necessary for the MC to be so useless? I mean, an average character is much more interesting than a "I was a nobody and rose from the bottom of society" nah, That sounds like a 15-year-old's idea. It's somewhat attractive for teenagers but for a slightly older audience, honestly the plot is... Well, you can imagine I suppose
