Comments of chapter undefined of Pokemon - Solo's Strange Journey

I think you have some big holes in your character here. I believe I get what you’re going for - bookish nerd with a whimsical worldview gets thrown in the deep end. But some stuff just isn’t lining up, as made evident in this chapter. If his dad is so sure he has trained his son to survive in the wild, to the point he takes away all camping comforts, then why is this Swole’s first time in the wild and why does he have no idea what to do? If Swole is a bookish nerd who is always reading, and who made it some way into a history involving Hisui, then he would be VERY aware of how violent Pokemon can be and where humanity sits in the food chain. That is the early story of Hisui. So why is he so ignorant? You might say it is because he ignored his parents’ warnings, but I would say he would have read about it hundreds of times. If you say he didn’t read about it then I would raise an eyebrow skeptically and ask then why his parents believed him ready to risk his life if they saw him ignoring their lessons and never let him practice. FFS he had never seen a pokemon battle not on TV if I am reading this right. All that to say: I strongly recommend you clean up a few sentences in the first few chapters so the inconsistencies don’t jump off the page. As it stands this reads like a person who should be dead and it is both their and their parents’ faults for doing zero preparation, and I don’t think that’s your intent in a story with a light tone?