Comments of chapter undefined of The Chronicles of the Eldritch War

I would like to suggest optimizing "Show, don't tell." From what I've read from the most part, it's mostly consisted of telling rather than showing.

Thrashers?? Because they don't have powers and they maltreat them huh! How cruel I say.. Well your paragraphs are quite long but pretty exclusive.. Keep up and am waiting for the day you get contracted and I could get give you gifts.

This chapter has great world building, but you still need to correct your errors... Secondly, your paragraphs are too long... but with time you would get better. keep writing

Seems like at the end of it, all Lloyd will be the one to bring down the Eldritch

Hmm hmmm I can see some love story cooking up between Amelia and Lloyd 😅

The first chapter was so good i like how you began your story

It's quite past paced. also, the 1/4 of your start was just story telling so it's rather boring for me...

wonderful first chapter; only a few spelling errors.