HiTherefic
It gave the impression that you just wanted to rush the story, so you made this death totally idiotic, I mean I know you want to go to the new world soon but come on, better not put characters if you're just going to develop them that way. I don't know why I'm writing this, the way you responded to the comments on the last chapter, it's obvious that you don't care what readers say even if it's constructive criticism.