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Mah_olliva

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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva5d
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    Honestly it was a little disappointing, I mean it was the author's choice that the mc basically in the first conversation with SHIED said that he came from another dimension and was gifted by someone with his capabilities, it just doesn't make sense for the author to have a careful personality base, that the mc cares about his identity, and the next moment he's telling SHIED that he came from another dimension, and let's not even talk about the mc accepting SHIED's shit, come on man they tried to hack his system twice , they drugged you and tried to steal the omnitrix, do something, I'm not talking about killing others but react like a person who had their life threatened for nothing

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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva13d
    Commented

    So... he has a lot of money but still has to steal basic electronics?

    Ch 30 chapter 30 function and secrets
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva1mth
    Commented

    I found it confusing, but we'll see in the next chapters

    Ch 1 Death Becomes Me
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva1mth
    Commented

    army of house elves, But seriously, it's worth him having some kind of group/organization, I mean if it was just a war between muggles and wizards it would be guaranteed, now HP x MCU, wizards need to unify to have any chance of survival

    Ch 8 8
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva1mth
    Commented

    thanks for the chapter. Please don't forget the Mexicans taking care of the elderly, a good addition to the group. Furthermore, the initial recruitment focus should be small towns, as there is less chance of survivors having been destroyed by hordes.

    Ch 4 Merle
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva1mth
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter, please continue

    Ch 3 Survivors
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva3mth
    Posted

    In addition to what I consider to be common errors in this genre (lack of depth in character personality in general, rushed events in a short period of time) I think what most disappoints is that it's not really kingdom building, I mean the MC just leaves out there dominating territories and plays into the hands of his "subjects" to administer, there is no type of discussion about choosing territory for construction, economic and food problems faced. Basically another "Lord of People" with op mc without any depth in general

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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva3mth
    Commented

    please make a chapter with the reactions of the other houses, I mean he decimated one of the great houses, stole his ancestral home and destroyed one of the religions of Westeros

    Ch 65 The Final Solution for the Iron Islands
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva4mth
    Commented

    I think it's better to place the informative chapters in an auxiliary session, to avoid breaking immersion in the story

    Ch 5 Power Rankings:
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    Reborn as Hades In PJO
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva4mth
    Commented

    Does every human have a talent for magic now? Or will you have some plausible explanation for why people on the Ark have a talent for magic and Earthlings don't?

    Ch 12 Chapter 9: When the Hammer Falls.
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva5mth
    Commented

    Excited for the next chapter

    Ch 3 003: Difference
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva6mth
    Commented

    Looking forward to your return

    Ch 29 Chapter 29
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva6mth
    Commented

    Will MC stay the whole story being a regional xenophobe?

    Ch 14 chapter 14 : This idiot
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva7mth
    Commented

    The mc should buy fabrics and use his power to make more detailed clothes and sell them, same thing for swords and armor, the nobles would love to pay a lot for armor full of details from their houses

    Ch 15 A reunion
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva8mth
    Replied to Avarath123

    He asked for universal evolutionary talent, so even if he doesn't have talent for something, after coming into contact with it he will have talent for it. But it got a little confusing, I'll probably change it in the wishes chapter later.

    Ch 1 Ch03 - First Steps
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva8mth
    Commented

    kinda early for SHIELD to get involved

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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva9mth
    Replied to Mah_olliva

    For those who are in doubt, the data on who the 14 Omega-level mutants are is from the first edition of House of X, by Jonathan Hickman.

    Ch 10 Stabby Stab
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva9mth
    Commented

    Usually when the MC is mutant, I prefer separatist movements, I mean look at the comics I don't even need to talk about the possibilities. I like the way the MC wants to go, I think he should develop a cure for mutants who have extreme physical mutations or powers that negatively impact their lives, of course he should store the data of these "undesirable" powers for future use. Also the mutants have around 14+ (if I'm not mistaken) Omega level mutants, so the author has plenty of space to showcase new mutants in the unexplored countries in the comics.

    Ch 10 Stabby Stab
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva9mth
    Commented

    Isn't LaGuerta from Dexter?

    Ch 28 Chapter 28:
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva9mth
    Commented

    It gave the impression that you just wanted to rush the story, so you made this death totally idiotic, I mean I know you want to go to the new world soon but come on, better not put characters if you're just going to develop them that way. I don't know why I'm writing this, the way you responded to the comments on the last chapter, it's obvious that you don't care what readers say even if it's constructive criticism.

    Ch 11 Chp 7
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