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Comments of chapter undefined of New life with a sci-fi system

Chaddts
ChaddtsLv1Chaddts

classic case of too much telling and not enough showing. nothing about the story feels organic. Just a rush of meaningless "He did this", "He did that". The first mission was incredibly poorly written. you didnt show us what he did, instead you told us in the most boring way possible, and then timeskipped without building any kind of personlity or relationships with any of the characters.

Kevin_P_3783
Kevin_P_3783Lv11Kevin_P_3783

Annnnnnd desde :(