Comments of chapter undefined of My interracial harem of beautiful queens
My interracial harem of beautiful queens
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Positive criticism here; your overuse of grace and elegance as descriptions of the women and the continuous use of Adam smiling really made it hard to be immersed in the story and info dumping the elders’ appearances in one go was not wise unless you plan on describing how they look again when the MC interacts with them personally. Describing their hair as ‘light’ is also weird, what color is their hair exactly, like is some of their hair light blue, light red, etc. All you’re saying is ‘light’.
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