I know he wants to make his own novels into a movie but why right of the bat he owns the copyright already might be better to do others that might get made soon since he already has a limited amount of time of future knowledge
A bit too streached out. The beginning was good but later chapters have too much not needed info. Not enought progression. It’s like Dbz 1 fight 10-20 episodes, but much more boring.
good work bro
and I know this is new for you and maybe playing with a few extra pov's is a bit much now
but you really lagged a 1500 words chapter to a 3000 one