Marcel_Mercy
It's Good. You have a good grasp of writing. Just read before uploading for small mistakes. I am not very fond of FL but I know this much that it's good. And Since I don't know much about FL I won't be able to tell whether the FL audience will like it or not. But the Girl MC is good. People will feel sad for her and that's your win as a writer. Great Work, Mercy. Now have Mercy on yourself and stop doubting yourself. You are a great writer. 😇