Comments of chapter undefined of Conqueror of the omniverse

To help with your grammar I suggest using grammarly, it’s not perfect but it’s free so you don’t have to worry about subscriptions

I'm not gonna lie the idea is there, but the character dialog sucks. Hawkgirl asks like she has a stick up her rum. While Batman says some uncharacteristic things and speaks a little to much. The flow is constantly being thrown off by changes made later that have no warning or description. overall I would say you should keep writing but also get someone to temp read it fore to find mistakes.

gracias por el capitulo

Keep going please 🤩

Thxs for the chap

Thanks for the chapter