HideousGrain
I didn't like this chapter, it feels like everything is about Michael, when it shouldn't be. He's clearly not the only "nice" human. We are told that more than 5000 humans are coming but we have the impression that it is only 100 humans, I understand that a lot goes to the expanded origin but here we have the impression of a void. The world isn't alive, it seems like it only revolves around the mc and that's not good. I don't know if you know what I mean, it seems very important to me!
Yes, that's a bit of the problem with this type of application. Readers always want more content, which gives a lot of pressure, which makes many authors miss world building. To overcome this I think you should make longer chapters where adding a little description would go unnoticed and would embellish your story. But not easy to do, I admit...
HideousGrain:The novel revolves around Michael, which is why everything is written the way it is. I could add more POVs or the importance of other characters, but then readers would complain about these chapters calling them 'fillers'. Of course, the world doesn't revolve around him, but the important aspects mentioned here are...well important. Nonetheless, I will keep your comment in mind
This is the only novel I've been willing to pay for early releases this month. The amount of effort and struggles and paying off in the quality of your work. Of the 20 or novels I'm currently reading, thus far this has been the most enjoyable pacing.To offer feedback because it was requested - I hope that relationships with supporting and side characters continue to be important. In too many novels in this genre as soon as the MC moves into a certain power tier, all the other characters/relationships that helped keep the mc relatable and likable disappear.I don't find all powerful characters who develop a god complex to be very interesting.At (or near) this stage I'd like to see more thoughtfulness from Michael go into picking his traits to develop a more cohesive system. At this stage his different powers feel like a grab-bag, which makes sense for now. A penalty for moving/swapping traits was introduced - while thats not necessarily a bad thing, Michael researching and making a custom mix of traits for different fights would be something I think I'd enjoy. Also to echo some other commenters - trait fusion!Finally, I hope the traumas Michael (and other characters) have developed continue to be something they have to work through and deal with and have meaningful impacts in decisions and actions. A lot of authors create trauma for their characters only to handwave them away a few chapters/arcs later when either its inconvenient or no longer what the author wants to focus on. At best you might get something that reads like, "He was sad and hurt, but he still behaved completely rationally and didn't let his emotions affect him at all. He overcame the problem and then was never affect by it ever again".
The story is really good it s progressing smoothly. However i am worried for the future power scaling, as Michael will continue amassing soul traits and improving them I don't see a way for other human or races to contend with him if they don't find a way to at least improve the stars of their soul traits. Besides that nothing worries me you are doing a great job keep it going đđđ
I've enjoyed the story so far. The only problem I have is with some of his soultraits: glacicle for example, I hope he can upgrade/replace it to ice manipulation/creation, and I'm not much of a fan of the reinforced sword qi soultrait either since he cannot use it at full power due to his preferred choice of weapon
hope the battle exchange doesnt drag out too much and we can go to the flag war soon... i personally dont like tournament arks because it feels like filler even understading that you use the battle exchange to introduce new characters for us. And the story is great till now, the world you built is super good and make me imagine all sort of plots and plans for the mc in my head hehe. the only downside is that where i live is expensive to upgrade my privilege tier and i can just get the tier 1 ocasionaly :(
really enjoying the story a lot, and the pacing. I also like that Michael is starting to trust more as he gets back to himself after losing his brother.I do wonder if he will get to the point of having a close circle of connections that he trusts enough to share more about his soul traits and helps them grow theres. such helping him speed his territory development further as more resources are funnelled Into him.it's quite clear with the curse of the bloodline that very difficult hardships will appear bringing him to the life and death again and again, what them challenges will be well that's all part of the storykeep up the amazing work, this is a stunning book, with endless possibilities for the future
the story is wonderful so far. only want him to him to focus on acquiring elemental soul traits. and the story says that he acquired many martial arts techniques from the Lord rift but it hasn't been explored. And he has to acquire a sword. because he just doesn't use the spear well. it's either he purchases spear arts or he should rather do that for tiara.
The pace is slower than the average novel here... But I do think it is necessary for the sake of character progression and the world building...Personal suggestion : just make sure the wait is worthy in the end... or you can use some "mystery" / "curiosity" at the start of the big episode so the reader have a better reason to waitGood luck with that author, 11/10 will always waiting