Comments of chapter undefined of Legendary Shelter Survival Guide
Legendary Shelter Survival Guide
sahejRocks
Chapter comments5
Wow... They completely freacked out when faced with a low level plant, something that could have been dealt with a single fireball turned into an "Epic" fight, they gave part of their limited food to a wolf, who somehow is now their pall, and the shelter who was supposed to be central in the story was placed at random, then neglected... Feels like a lot of potential went wasted... This could use a re-write, unless the story is meant to be casual.
Yeah but i mean, a shelter can't work without water in the first place, the location is the most important, defensive situation, natural ressources ... With such a bad start, how is the MC supposed to stand out? It's like starting with a crippled leg from the get go. Your synopsis hooked me, but the story feel very plain so far :s
sahejRocks:I am glad that you have commented, I can assure you that the story is not casual. If you read ahead, you will see that the shelter and things related are the main focus cause I like writting about it.^^
