Bro, after reading this story I’m going to have expanded my dictionary multiple times, I will become a lawyer, using words that I don’t know mean anything >:)
"To me, you are more than a machine"
People don't talk like that. A simple "Who the heck are you?" is enough. The rest is unneeded and just makes this sound too try hard.
Bruh. . That feist impression for the MC is the most important for a novel... How old is MC anyway? ?. . He's acting weird and goofy tbh. .. If this goes on it'll be more bland than exciting to read..