Comments of chapter undefined of Soulbound: Finding my way back to you in the Apocalypse (BL)
Catching up and still have some to do but I'm looking forward to where the overall story goes. I did want to give some feedback from a readers standpoint though. Maybe most of this is just me and not others. While these two have their own interesting story or backstory, it doesn't really seem relevant at all at this point in the story or plot. It seems so far removed from the premise of the story and what happened in the beginning that it seems really out of place and kind of not needed right now. Especially with how many chapters it's been. I get introducing a character or characters that will be more relevant later like some of Alexis' backstory but he was already mentioned previously and also seems to have a big part later as likely being the guy in Georgi's visions/dreams. It also was fairly short, especially compared to this. From the previous future these 2 seem to be completely irrelevant aside from 1 being in the Black Hawks previously and then setting up future regulations for the military. It's seems like a full side story is being told when it should be more of a backstory for the military. This full side story doesn't seem to have any bearing on where things are at so far and doesn't seem to lend much to it aside from world building where it isn't really necessary. This does seem like an important story to include to you but I'm not sure if this is the place for it as a reader. It kind of takes you out of immersing in the story and the actual characters the story was initially about, especially so early in the book. Again these are just my thoughts, maybe it's just me. I do look forward to where this goes and I can tell you put quite a bit into building up things in this world.
i fully agree. i didn't plan on the front of the story being so long, the main characters should be dead by now which would lead me to be able to build the world and it's Paradise, and so i didn't repeat myself i kinda skipped that part. after all if i explained it once then they died and then i had to repeat it all it seemed kind of overkill. now they are still happily alive, i realized that error and therefore i am fully rewriting and re editing my story, but since i have a full time job and need to update daily it takes some time. about 30/35 chapters or probably even more will be added based on Bai Langs and Mitzuki and the world Paradise before and after Bai Lang was abandoned. So while we see Alexis being introduced in those chapters, Maritsu and Gabriel's story arc which i am writing now will be moved way back. their characters are important because the apocalypse focuses on four main groups, so their history, how they knew eachother and what there connections are is important to the story. Mainly Bai Lang, Alexis, Gabriel's and Georgi's group will be the center of the story Therefore I will continue to delve deeper in every character. To know which characters your dealing with and to know why they would do certain actions in the future Paradise Because of my rewrite i will also correct the fact that Bai Lang and Mitzuki kinda seem irrelevant characters now, i already added about 4 chapters, so far, which fully contains world building and Bai Lang. Before even seeing Mitzuki POV when he is on a missiom but i will reupload it when i am fully done, so i hope you will continue to wait.... thank you for your comment. i really appreciate it. and i hope you will enjoy my book. I would be really sorry if you didn't like it..... After all writers create a world hoping that others will enjoy partaking in that world so i hope you give me some time to create a world for you. if not ty for giving my book a chance!