Comments of chapter undefined of Game of Thrones: Lord of the Seven Seas
Game of Thrones: Lord of the Seven Seas
Axel_wheel
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thanks for the chapter I will mention you overplayed with the words dexterity agility reflexes it was almost every paragraph you were mentioning them making it constantly appear makes it just seem annoying I'd find a better way to word or describe it or use it to summarize several fights instead of mentioning his supernatural dexterity every other paragraph
I think the fight went well despite the writing seeming to repeat itself at times describing the same thing more than once but you can understand it was a battle in the middle of a war not having many options, but I still have that feeling that these summoned NPCs have Of great importance, will the summoned people get married in the future? Will it be with relevant characters? Or will it be a kind of royal guard? So far I'm loving your story.
