Comments of chapter undefined of My Wife is the Asura Empress
My Wife is the Asura Empress
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Chapter comments17
I see the potential so far. but as someone who hasn't reached when the story "gets good" the introductory chapters need a bit of a rewrite.
the prophecy reveal is in chapter 3. and give a little idea that she's being deceptive. like her dad giving her a questioning look if she does something excessive, "she frowned, wondering why he hadn't snapped back at her even after her father chastised her for being aggressive." is a way you can put it in without going "I'm not like this. I just want to test him." it breaks flow and is akin to the character telling the reader information.
thewhitesnow:It was recently added, readers hated Lia without it... people stopped dropping this book and started hating Lia less as i added these internal dialogues
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