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Comments of chapter undefined of My Wife is the Asura Empress

aonly9470
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I see the potential so far. but as someone who hasn't reached when the story "gets good" the introductory chapters need a bit of a rewrite.

aonly9470
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writing a second reply because the first one doesn't explain well. the internal dialogue about the prophecy can generally be cut out and improve the story, as it leaves the players in suspense about "Why rio?"and so connect with him when he specifically asks lia because she has made a special vow not to harm him

thewhitesnow:proofread, Grammer, or the dialogues and other stuff ? I have rewrote first three to fix grammar but didn't change dialogues...
Death_Sounds
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so when does she become less annoying

DaoistSLWwmk
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another beta male...

DaoistpzyM2d
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See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

Reaper_210
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Thanks for the chapter

cyberlector_321
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gracias por el cap

Nickjr321
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Thanks for the chap

3ddy
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tftc