Comments of chapter undefined of The Heroine Eavesdropped on My Voice Heart
The Heroine Eavesdropped on My Voice Heart
DogLickerGods
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well its ok, I mean like you said he has a destiny villain Halo that should be at least slightly superior to the Protagonist halo, if you dont use it it whould be a waste, also like you said you made it look reasonable, she wanted help to revive the OG Basara so Influciated by the Villain halo and knowing MC is a trust worthy peron by the inner voice she heard she dedicate to him in order to helo og basara. Its not bad knowing all the elements mc had ar his side, If protagonist Halo can make Chinese Heroines fall in love with the protagonist after he R*ped them then this is nothing
You know sensei I think it will be the first time that I say something more or less negative in this story but......... that was too forced even for my liking, I will give three examples of how you could have connected them. one you could have made her accept the deal but not accepting her as payment thus gaining some recognition from yuki, her inner voice is fine what she said but would have included that she disliked the fact that she offered herself as payment that makes her see as an easy woman because that is what can be seen or so you made it see, continuing, yukival listening to Qin tian's voice would feel a little hurt and trying to fix the matter but with tian interrupting her and accepting but not so enthusiastically what would make the heroine try to make tian see her favorably and one as a cheap woman there would be more development of both with yuki trying to make tian see that she is not that type of woman and when tian fulfills his part of the deal and seeing that it was a failure, that she only got a bad image as a cheap woman from her point of view, there she would try twice as hard to change her image so that Tian would notice her, I'm not saying that they had the t rate coldly if not that he treats her more as simple acquaintances and nothing more, for now making yuki fall in love with tian in the process, this is what I had in mind, sensei sometimes it is good to ask for one opinion or another not to try to do it all by itself remember that here in the comments there are some good ideas you just have to differentiate which is good and which is not postscript: thanks for the chapter sensei
