Comments of chapter undefined of LetMeRegress - Don't read this
LetMeRegress - Don't read this
daniz_
Chapter comments10
Very nice! Will leave a review. Although, and I don't know if it was just me, but just reading that full chapter, I had no idea if the main character was a man or woman... I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, or if it's important at this point. But the scenes are great and you can really feel the emotion of the character.
Ok review đ time đ First off, i like your style, its quite similar to mine in the way you dramatacise aspects by repeating them in different ways. however i also noticed this tactic being used way more often than it should have been. imo, you should have spaced out them more, so ast to keep that level of power, when you use it too often, you lose that power.Though its not like that completely ruined m readng experience, just something to keep in mind. Id like more explanation, but i assume that will come with later chapters. this one was kinda all over the place, but its the first chapter so its fine. i like your use of vocabulary as its quite simple and easy to read, but i would have liked to see a larger variety. for example while reading, i came accross a para where you used the word âdayâ wayyyy to many times. so keep that in mind, use of different words make you the word flow better. you left the chapter on a cliffhanger and that was good. If you had more chapters, i perhaps would have read even more. Anyways cool, you did a good job, just you need to learn a few techniques and those come with practice so youre all good đ
