Comments of chapter undefined of The Extra's Dominance

Oh my! This is much nicely written than I had expected from a beginner writer. Good job. I kinda have a feeling as if there's someone else behind the screen who's talking to raven as system since it's dialogues seems a bit less robotic(?)

Yo author! It's very nice. I've liked it! Keep continuous in this way. 😉👌

Thank you for the chapter!

Recieved should be written 'Received' other than that, all are good!

starting to like this novel from the first chapter 😃

Everything is so well explained 🙌🦋

Cool intro, could really feel the character, too much I think it's creepy. Anyway, I like the book, it's really nice. 🥰

Now thats a nice start!

A system that acts to hurt the host even before it meets the host? A host who insults the only thing which can be of help to him at that moment I already don't like host and system.

👍🏻Great introduction. I like the system that interacts with Mc 😂

not bad author, keep it up.

a system that is annoying and had its own will... a mc who gets bored even with lot of mordern devices.. and some overpowered higer being who just casually created a world and kidnapped mc for their entertainment ....... all these things are the thing that I hate the most in novel especially 3rd..... its pathetically written that some higher being creating everything..... I really like where author atleast try to introduce some science but here author just doesn't did anything and boom introduce higher being.... I would rather read boring mc story which have at least no higher being creating with snap and some use of physics( like universe planted or world , spaceship or atleast cutivation type world building is also ok)

Gostei bastante. Vou ver os outros capítulos para ter uma opinião mais detalhada.

thanks for the chapter

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Unlike some idiots that complain about the FIRST chapter I only think that it a rather interesting beginning compared to many similar books.

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your only grammar mistake can be written off as a typo. great work on the chapter. it's pretty interesting.