Comments of chapter undefined of Fated to kill you

I am not talented as a author myself but I just want to give you an advise. You need to stop writing for now and learn to use dialogue tags and punctuations. You are writing the dialogue with the descriptions causing the paragraphs to be too long and jumbled to the point where it is hard to understand what you are writing. If you go too far before anyone gives you this advise or before stopping and taking the time to actually learn writing format, it will be hard to correct the mistake when you realise then later. I am just advising you as a fellow author who started with no idea of how to properly write so please do not take this the wrong way. 😁