The shorter chapters may be your style, but I encourage you to try lengthening them at least until you get a proper ending. The current approach gives the reader whiplash at the abrupt stops.
Everything about the story is good, just not the structures and punctuations. The choice of words seem off too. Author, work with your writing. Edit them and this book will be an interesting one. Your writing is light, fast, detailed, and easy to read in fact.
