This book overall is rather solid. it does require some knowledge of the cultivation genre to pick up certain aspects, but the style is relatively easy to understand. It could be better at flushing out the characters as things progress. The writing quality is a big plus for this one, and the world in itself is rather creative in my eyes. I'm curious about what kind of characters and story will ultimately come out of this one. This one is worthy of occasional revists.

To be declared Queen of the vampires is one thing, but commanding the others as a human will prove to be difficult. Especially

These chapters are seemingly getting better in quality. Keep up the good work.

Dina was dogwalked in this encounter. I am curious about how things will go forward.

I sent you a friend request. I am Nakumaraitami

Of course! Send me your discord, and I'll send you a friend request.

One bad thing I will point out is how insignificant a lot of these scenes seem to be. The chapters jump from place to place with little semblance of importance to the actions thus far. This is a byproduct of the chapter ls being too small and lacking of content.

I am quite favorable about this chapter. I hope the good work continues.

There are a few typos in this chapter. I wanted to comment directly on it, but I'll let you know of their existence.

Angelo's characterization of not harming humans is an interesting one. I wonder what kind of test will occur to clash with his resolve.

A solid chapter is a good thing. It isn't bad, but it could use some work. Overall, it gets the job done when it comes to publishing on webnovel. Webnovel recommends smaller chapters, but you don't want to keep cutting and jumping scenes. In reality, a lot of the smaller chapters would be much better in a longer chapter.

This paragraph seems to be missing a few key words. I recommend looking over them.

It is a compliment. Your story has an unique feel to it.

I'm glad that you caught that. Ever since they updated the mobile app, my editing process has been flawed, and minor mistakes like that slip through. If you manage to catch any others, then pointing them out would be helpful. I'll try to find a way to better proofread and edit away many of the mistakes.

This is a really solid chapter. You do good work with your smaller chapters

I will say that you have a unique style of writing in the third person. It is as if you are trying a Shakespearean, poetic tone as you write. I do think that your descriptions can suffer, but I will see going forward.

This section could use some cleaning up for greater effect.

This chapter wasn't too bad all things considered. I expect greater improvement as we continue the story.

I'm glad that you are enjoying it. I did have a secondary project, but it is currently on the shelf. I do plan on continuing this one for the foreseeable future.