Scorpious_star
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Nice chapter
Good opening chapter thank you
ahhh first chapter is interesting!!!đ„°đ„°đ„°
I have overall positive thoughts about this story. If this one chapter is a representative of the story, then you pass the test. Well written and story driven.
great chapter just a few little things to work on.
Loved this chapter
Hmmm...This chapter had me at the intro
Good story line.... Check this para again.
Amazing first chapter, love the story line progression
Chapter is well written
