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Comments of chapter undefined of Conquering Moirai

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AuHNG
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There are a few minor edits I would do to increase readability. You can add emotion, also, by making the mother more dramatic, like she sighs, her eyebrows furrow, as she gasps for air. It was like a deep burden had suddnely sunk into her chest, before she managed to lift it off and speak once more. You know, something dramatic lol.

Miss_Black05
Miss_Black05AuthorMiss_Black05

Yes, thank you