This chapter was confusing - first she undressed herself (because she sensed he was inviting her to undress) and then she invited him to undress her??
It sounds like there was a re-write so maybe that’s what happened?
I am so much more pleased with where the story is going after you changed it good job author 👍 Ophelia is so precious and Killorn is so flustered around her I can tell she fell in love first but he fell harder 👏👏🥵
I noticed a small discrepancy. Between the rewritten chapters and the ones you left relatively the same. You changed the timeframe from 5 years to 2 years. This was not corrected in the unedited chapters. Thought I would bring it too your attention. Fantastic Work on the revision though.