DreamThree
After more than 100 good or decent chapters, I can say that you finally wrote something that is absolutely ridiculous. I expected you to simply gloss over the "original" MC movie, without going into detail. Instead you were confident enough to think you could write a decent movie script? All the dialogue is completely dumb. Leo must be thinking you were pulling his leg. Stick to action scenes, that's where all the ascence of gta is xD