Comments of chapter undefined of Naruto: Root Ninja
Naruto: Root Ninja
komega
Chapter comments14
I think the goal and journey are missing, you either concentrate on the goal or the journey and character development. On the other hand As your story is now I don’ t see much difficulties that are long term, only some short term like the attack of his teammates but no complications. You have the perfect villain in Danzo or a hidden orgamization of mercenaries or something like that. But as of now your character is just simply existing and not creating in an already existing story. My Tip: Be bold, change what you want to change and let him live a life of difficulties Fun and Creative writing ✍️
for a root ninja he looks weak. they are supposed to be elite ninja. i know he's still young but he should be a little bit better than G and T even if they are genius. add more info and details on kumo like famous shinobi and other things. you have a good story but it's complicated to say what is lacking but i want more. i know i'm greedy. sorry but continue [img=recommend][img=update]
Well, with the advent of romance, the story, how to say it, became boring because there are many such stories. At the expense of weapons, I could come up with something new, because swords are everywhere, it's just a typical cliché. Root ninjas are the elite, and your character is a typical ninja who doesn't seem to have had any root training (too many emotions and attachments). And honestly, the story does not match the name, the interaction with the roots, except for the beginning of the story, is zero.
Hey the plot is going fine and as for deviating from title, a story that does not evolve doesn't paint a good picture of author. And yes the idea of time skip is a good one and maybe during the time skip make it so that his super soldier serum is complete. Also in my opinion add something about natural energy. Cheers!
the storys name isnt true to the content anymore we all came here to see him plotting against danzo and the root while actually being in the root organization . to fix the boring parts i recomend either him getting caught betraying the root or orochimaru kidnaping his teamates to get his research! so that hes forced to become stronger i dont mind the love thing im actually liking it so far.
