Comments of chapter undefined of Transcending 10,000 Daos [BL]
Transcending 10,000 Daos [BL]
Muthoni_Murira
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I like your descriptions of character and feelings. A very handful can do that in an opening chapter. So kudos!
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Muthoni_Murira
Cool opening chapter. I feel the same as Yu Nianzhen, like huhhhh what's going on where are we??? I think it's a little too disorientating, so maybe a bit more background description of where Yu Nianzhen was before would be helpful, or something to ground the character in the present, to make them feel less confused or at least to help them understand what's going on otherwise the whole chapter is just our ML going "???"
Good job setting the scene in this first chapter! One major note: Webnovel is written in American English and serves an international audience. It's good web etiquette in this case to write in American English rather than UK English. The major difference is your use of single quotes for speech and double quotes for thought, which may confuse most readers who are used to the American version. You may also cause them to think your story is filled with misspellings due to different spelling practices. In any event, good luck with your story!
