Comments of chapter undefined of A Hero by the Name of Silk
A Hero by the Name of Silk
Lightblade23
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Like I said before, your work is truly phenomenal. You put in actual research and made your character life like with an actual personality and problems. I LOVED how you handled the effects of the economy on orphanages and how it affected the staff aswell. You didnt make Cindy a Mary Sue who could easily handle all of the abuse, you had her conform to it, seen in how she reacts to the word 'useless'. This is a true fanfiction and book with the amount of time and work you put in. I also love the angst as I'm a big angst fan, yet I love to see good things happen every once in a while. One thing I would like to see though,(Doesn't matter if you don't) is that Cindy is an actual hero and doesn't instantly know that killing is the only way. I'd like her to have morals that she can't pass and that she won't kill. (Possibly have her accidentally kill someone due to not controlling strength and it affects her and her mind, making her not want to kill, and have nightmares plague her) Basically, I want an actual spider-woman with your style of writing which is angsty, not some anti-hero edge lord who can kill easily. Another thing I'd like to see is Yuri, maybe with someone from the X-Men but I don't really care that much, as your writing has me hooked so I won't drop it no matter what. Seriously keep up the great work, will we get a chapter this Sunday?
I really like your writing skills. And usually I don’t Leave comments like this, but I actually think you could write a great story, so I want to legitimately Give you feedback even if it is going to be kinda harsh. I want to make it clear though, that you are a good writer, and you should take pride in what you create, so if the rest of my comment ends up coming across as super hateful or scathing, I want to let you know it’s unintentional. Also keep in mind that my disagreements with your story are arguably due to personal preference, so take my opinions as such. Alright, here it goes: Holy moly, this story is so edgy, I get paper cuts from scrolling. What grown individual would let themselves be treated in such a way. She is not an actual child who believes are no ways out, there is literally no reason for the MC to continue putting up with LITERAL TORTURE (including but not limited to: solitary confinement in a very small space with no clothes and rusty nails, waterbording, and physical beatings) and emotional abuse. When really, she could just call Obadiah Stane and throw an arc reactor at his face, then demand a job which he would very willingly give her. And that is literally the first idea that popped into my mind. She could Call the police, or walk into the station, and keep doing it until you find an authority figure who isn’t dirty and will follow through with an investigation into the orphanage. She could carry a knife, or some other deterrent to scare people off. There are OPTIONS. And for someone who overcame a life of hardship once already, it is beyond belief that she chose to just do nothing. She is not helpless, and painting the MC into such a corner is just so unrealistic and edgy. There is so much gratuitous suffering, that it makes it hard to read and totally breaks the immersion. It is just not a believable character at this point. Anyways yeah. That was my rant. I hope something positive can be taken from it, but I dunno. Yeah.
I don't know, why would you read a novel in which the character constantly receives blows? I'm not saying it's a mary sue, but I think these guys haven't heard of the middle ground, the theme of the spiderman character was that both blows and good things were in order, this MC at least does not advance anything at all, I can ignore the fact that the MC seems to be mentally unstable from the beginning, but the fact that he can not even have an average adolescence and that he will probably continue to suffer only to end up in some nonsense of "I'm a neighborhood heroine who doesn't kill", a person in reality, who goes through these things, doesn't have and won't have a hero complex... this is literally for masochists, if poor spiderman was Hit> Normal life> hit> hit> normal life> normal life> hit, etc this MC is literally Hit>hit>hit>hit etc. xd
