Lu Yiyi
OK. This story is good, but I've got some bones to pick. The author needs to learn about consistency. She cannot keep losing her phone and then have it magically appear. She can't keep saying she has no money like she did at the beginning and then have money magically appear in her pockets. That's just unreasonable! Now she does have money so that won't actually happen again, but please! Please! Be reasonable in your writing!