Comments of chapter undefined of In This Corner Of The Multiverse
In This Corner Of The Multiverse
GoldFinger
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Si gets reincarnated in overlord, plays the game Yggdrasil, chooses a character that will be his body/race in the near future and maxes to level 100 Just skim though 1 chapter from both these, I am sure those will explain better than I did 1) OVERLORD: GOD OF THE NEW WORLD 2) Of Maple syrup, skeletons and warcrimes (Overlord/Marvel)
GoldFinger:give me a plotline and I'll see.
First off, nice visual presentation of the chapter. paragraph aren't too clamped so reading is easier. 2ndly, quite a long chapter, not tyat we hate it but can you keep with this amount of words with it being filled with fillers. 3rd, language; Very good no comment except keep it up 4th, It seems to be shifting from 3rd pov to 1st pov imho. No very good again imo, atleast let readers know or something. 5th, Till now with all the anime and movies I've watched I've never watched fate but I do have some knowledge so I can't really give you an evaluation on story aspect but if you can provide the world background in an interesting way then yeah readers will flock to you atleast I will 6th, Not really related! This seems to be your 2nd project apart including the 2nd part of In this corner of the multiverse (his son), so I wonder if you have ever thought of creating a db fanfiction, yeah pretty selfish of me 🤣 but that is a good project you can think on imo
While you're writing is phenomenal, I just can't stand the mc anymore. You have written an amazingly complex narrative with so many interlocking things that mesh well. I just hate the mc's process to become stronger, all those crimes, deaths, cruelty, it's too much, I ache from it. I bid this work adieu and hope that you're next work is of lighter fare. Although of course the work stands proof that there is an audience that appreciates it fully.
