Comments of chapter undefined of Alexander Benjamin Tennyson (Ben 10 Fanfic)
Alexander Benjamin Tennyson (Ben 10 Fanfic)
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Hombre mientras leo esto me enoje por el castigo de Lex , no por lo estúpido si no porque la IA lo dejo como estaba , enserio yo me enojo si se pone de lado de la persona que la encerró en el reloj ya me imagina accediendo al control maestro o quitándome el castigo enfrente de todos mientras le digo que fue ella la que propuso hackear el Omnitrix siendo que me opuso solo por sus inseguridades por eso odio las IA pensantes son estúpidas y molestas
Dear Author,🙏 I appreciate the effort you have put into crafting this novel. Your writing style has undoubtedly captured the attention of readers, and your storytelling skills are commendable. However, I would like to provide some feedback and make a humble request for a few updates to enhance the realism and depth of the narrative.👍 As we evolve as readers and watcher's our tastes and expectations tend to change.While your story has been captivating thus far, I believe it would benefit from incorporating some intense and visceral and blooded scenes. This can be achieved by portraying the consequences of certain actions, particularly when characters endure physical harm. For instance, in the scene where Lex throws Gwen and Azimuth against the wall, the impact should be depicted with a greater sense of realism. Gwen's injuries could be described in a manner that reflects the severity of the event. It would be fitting to portray blood coming from her mouth, indicating internal injuries, and perhaps bruises on her body to emphasize the physical trauma she has endured.😔 By bringing these elements into the narrative, you will effectively cater to the changing preferences of your readers and create a more immersive experience. It will demonstrate that your novel is not merely a children's story but a mature work that can captivate a wider audience. I have full confidence in your writing abilities and believe that incorporating these updates will elevate your work to new heights while maintaining the essence of your storytelling. Thank you for considering my input, and I look forward to seeing how you further enhance the novel.👍 The way you write makes it look like a child story well everythings good and going but we are not the children we once were we now need to see some bloody scene our taste has changed So make it look real and display injures Your work is great just don't spoil it like it's a cartoon and you are doing great just needs some updates thanks if you read it tell me what are you going to do
